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Tighten your writin’

ThinksoCreative_Writing_Tips_Kim_MickenbergTighten Your Writin’ is an ongoing series dedicated to writing tips and best practices. 

In literature, it’s fine if a writer adds flowery language, ornate details, and other flourishes. That’s because when you sit down to read a book, you’re already interested in reading the text — or you wouldn’t have purchased it or picked it up off the shelf.

Marketing writing is different. Marketing and advertising copy needs to disrupt and engage; it needs to pull a reluctant reader in. And it needs to be efficient: You don’t have a lot of time to capture a reader’s attention.

That’s why Thinkso takes content — editorial concepts and written text — just as seriously as we take design. And although we believe everyone should strive to write well, good writing is critical to marketing-related communications.

How do we define ​“good writing”? We think it’s clean (error- and typo-free), clear, and engaging. It’s direct and grammatically sound. It’s integrated with a product’s visual components. It accomplishes (or conveys) identified business goals. If writing has all these qualities, we say it’s ​“tight.”

In the interest of helping our clients and friends tighten up their own writing, we’re starting a series devoted to simple, clear, easy-to-follow writing tips. Tightening up your own writing isn’t as hard as you might think.

The first step? Simplifying your verbs.

Tip 1: Simplify your verbs.

One of the most common (and distracting) style errors I’ve seen working professionals make is using clunky ​“filler” verbs — like ​“helping” or ​“conducting.” As an editor, I am constantly deleting these or rewriting sentences that have them.

Why? Because in my opinion, you’re either actively doing something, or you’re not. You’re usually not ​“helping improve” something — you’re improving it. You’re generally not ​“conducting a review” — you’re reviewing something or someone. You’re not ​“working to support an analysis” — you’re either supporting an analysis (because you’re helping your coworker) or you’re analyzing data yourself.

Sentences without filler verbs are also a lot more powerful: Saying you’re ​“improving” something sounds a lot more impressive than saying you’re ​“working to improve” something.

To that end, when you see words like ​“helping” and ​“conducting,” ask yourself if you can be more direct. You probably can.

Here are some common constructions that can be simplified:

  • Conduct an analysis
  • Working to provide (and all the ​“working to” constructions: working to consolidate, working to support, working to effectuate, etc.)
  • Perform an assessment
  • Carry out a review
  • Make revisions
  • Provide assistance
  • Gain an understanding
  • Helping develop
  • Doing research

You Be the Editor

Now it’s your turn to be the editor. Take a look at the sample sentences below, and simplify the verbs as appropriate. 

  1. I am working to conduct an analysis of the data before I hand it off to my colleague.
  2. He is going to perform an examination of the patient in the next two hours.
  3. I would love to provide assistance with the new initiative — especially if it means I get to conduct a survey of audience members.